Tag: witing

Freya’s Salvation Writing

Kia Ora!! blogers

This week me and my class did some witing.

do you like my witing?

A little girl rested her arms on the window sill and she was thinking about becoming a superhero she asks her dad ’’  one day will I become a super hero                                                                                                                                                         14 years later.

 On a cold and chilly night there was a thunderstorm.

There was a flash of lightning and a U.F.O appeared in the sky there was a loud booming voice from the U.F.O and it said ’’we are here to extract your DNA and  become more powerful’’ with the world left  in ruins a bright light  came from the ship and it was pulling the people up and appearing in  dome shaped containers.

A big gust of wind sucked all their DNA out of them but then tie diy girl came in with a bottle of toxic waste.

 She  poured it down onto the evil alien’s and then they all fell asleep.

She pushes the  button that says push me to open containers so she did and it worked ’’to easy’’

The containers opened and she hurried everyone to the exit. 

They managed to get out just in time.

She was a great superhero then she left her eldest daughter to become Tie diy girl 2.0 and she saved the day for the rest of her life.

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memories witing

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Here is a story we did over this week.

George had not worn his uniform for many years. Now that he finally did, the memories all came flooding back to him…

Gerald had not worn his uniform for many years.

Now that he finally did, the memories all came flooding back to him.

Gerald was a nice man.

He is proud of what he has done helping people survive in the war.

He is at the cemetery getting congatulated by some army troops on a cold autumn  morning, then he suddenly forgets that it was his wedding day with a lady called Zoe.  

He asks his soldier friend Sue, who is standing right next to him, “can you pretty please buy a ring fit for a princess?” “Ok sir” says Sue. “It’s alright, you don’t have to call me sir” says Gerald. “Ok sir” she says again.

 Gerald laughs his head off, meanwhile, Sue jumps into her car.

She races to the jewellery shop.

When the ceremony was done Gerald  raced to Grey Lynn park all the way on the other side of Town. Meanwhile, Sue is having trouble finding the perfect ring fit for a princess, but then she finds a ring that has a blue emerald on top of the ring.

Gerald just arrived at the wedding hoping to see Sue, and he did and Zoe was there too, then they became husband and wife and they had one little girl called Freya and one little boy called Jack together, they had so much fun and  when they grew up they made such joyful families and they all lived in harmony and lived happily ever after.   


 Please give me some feedback so one I can make this story evan better than last time.

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